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“Zane  it’s just a tear I don’t need new clothes!” Bland yelped.  “But it’s a big one. And I want to play dress up.”  Zane pouted a bit as his tendrils held up a bunch of dresses.  “You fit these things right?” He asked.  Bland jumped a bit. “h-how did you get those?”  “Your closet duh!” Zane said happily.  “Now come on~” Bland stepped back.  “N-no.” He turned around and started running with Zane running after him.
“…shouldn’t we help Bland?” Strawberry asked.  “Let’s wait a bit.” Alistair said while watching Bland barely dodge a tendril.  “This is fun to watch.”  Strawberry sighed.
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Ah this may suck but it it all I could think of.
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Over all, I like it. But the only problem there was was formatting. Here:

“Zane it’s just a tear I don’t need new clothes!” Bland yelped.

“But it’s a big one. And I want to play dress up.” Zane pouted a bit as his tendrils held up a bunch of dresses. “You fit these things right?” He asked.


Bland jumped a bit. “h-how did you get those?”

“Your closet duh!” Zane said happily. “Now come on~”

Bland stepped back. “N-no.” He turned around and started running with Zane running after him.

“…shouldn’t we help Bland?” Strawberry asked.

“Let’s wait a bit.” Alistair said while watching Bland barely dodge a tendril. “This is fun to watch.”

Strawberry sighed.


Not trying to offend your writing in any way, but that will help, especially is something is heavy in dialogue.
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